Like most edits I see on here, I would work on the B-Roll. It's not going to make the video better to have good b-roll, but it's going to make it worse if its not good. Mainly I thought the opening few shots were too long.
The skiing stuff was fine, it will get better with practice (smoother movement)
And when he says I'm going to go huge on the spread eagle, show him going huge on the spread eagle!
Skiing good start, just need to make the rest flow a little smoother.
Also, make sure you're in focus, or don't use the shot