What follows is a narrative of my high school career.

holy shit that is one of the most relatable pieces of literary work i have read other than the As and Bs more like Bs for me but one of my favorite parts is when you talk about instien and bill gates and how they bill dropped out of college and instien just did bad in high school although in the 3rd paragraph i think i got kindof lost other than that very well done
 
Don't forget to consider what percent of high school dropouts DON'T go on to have successful lives (based on what society calls successful).

 
I wish that i had something worthwhile to contribute to this but I really don't

I like the feel of your essay for sure but I'm wondering what your teacher's guidelines were for formality. I know mine would ream me out for using "sucks" or "it's". also, there didn't seem to be an overly clear thesis statement. and maybe that's not a requirement, but I couldn't find anything concrete in your opening paragraph that hinted at what was to come. (other than generalities.) I hope you understand what I mean.

my criticism is meant to be constructive. good luck and congrats on a well written essay. let us know how it does.
 
Just gave a ten to everyone who gave useful advice who wasn't already a ten.

And yeah I kinda noticed it's more persuasive than narrative...

oh well, it's AP Psych, I think it will fly.
 
High school has a point, but it tends to get lost in the competitions for colleges acceptance, forced curriculums, and kids who just dont care. The goal of education is to prepare the youth. But what to prepare them for? Should kids be taught the facts, or a better method to understand the facts? What constitutes a good education?
My experience is all right. I've been going to some of the best public schools in state since I was in kindergarden. I was TAGed, meaning they though I was talented and gifted. So much so apparently I was sent to fourth grade from second. When I was young I was thrilled at the idea to learn new things. I loved science and math, and I would devour any material relating to the two subjects. I was a self taught reader before I entered kindergarden. As I got older my passion began to die. I was so advanced I was no longer challenged and I lost interest in that which didnt advance my knowledge. I began to stop caring about school. What had once been the highlight of my day began to be a routine, and eventually I stopped enjoying it.
I'm now a senior in High School, and I couldn't care less about my grades. I am still pulling a 3.59 with two AP classes, but I rarely do homework at home. I skate by on a steady diet of cheating and bullshit with very little brainpower used. I still am considered smart, a National Merit Commended Student after scoring well on the PSAT and over 2000 on the SAT but what does it mean? So what I answered some questions well on a piece of fucking paper? How will all these tests and being "talented and gifted" help me in the future? I will get into a good college? Then I graduate then what the fuck does it all mean? If I'm succesful will people say, "we knew it cause he did so well on these tests!" or if I end up not making anything of my self will people look back at my past performances and think, "he had such potential." What if I dont want to make something of myself? What if I just want to ski, or play lacrosse, or follow my passion? What will that say about my schooling? How will that prepare me for that ? If I follow a passion that doesnt utilize my intelligence will I have failed in a way?

This sorta hit a topic thats on my mind alot so I wanted to say my shit and get my ideas out. I typed that all without any proof reading so its prbly pretty rough. It's just that when I was younger I felt like I could go on to do something great and I was told that, but the longer I was in the school system the less I felt this way. Now I'm a senior and I no longer no what to think.

Sorry for the rant
 
just having it easy in high school doesn't mean you should start slacking. use your potential and do something. my advice is try to follow your passions but still get a good education foundation. unless you want to just work paycheck to paycheck at a little job and play games and ski all your life (until you want a family then life gets serious)
 
I forgot to say what I though about your essay. It's well written, and you argued your position well. It's really easy for an essay like that to sound like youre complaining, but I think you do a good job of supporting your ideas. I especially like the one that critiqued how school teaches you not to fail, and the examples to show it can be good to fail.
One thing about those self-made millionaires who drop out is they normally drop out because they have better things outside of school, or know they can be successful outside of school. I have a friend who's dad dropped out of college, but it was only because he was already a successful real estate agent and had other things in the works.
 
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