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i wonder if there is anyone not lazy enough to read this it would really be apreciated

Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame. Terry was a man who despite having cancer and having to amputate his leg ran across Canada to raise money for cancer research. Terry raised awareness of cancer and inspired millions of Canadians and people worldwide. He raised money for cancer research pushing it forward and giving hope to many. Terry Fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame. His great dedication and determination towards this cause proved that anything is possible if you simply believe.

Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame because he raised awareness of cancer and inspired millions of Canadians and people worldwide. In 1977 Terry was diagnosed with Osteogenic Sarcoma, a rare form of bone cancer. To stop the spread of cancer, doctors amputated his leg - six inches (15 cm) above the knee. Terry then learned how to use an artificial leg. After three weeks he was walking. (Terry never forgot his experience in the hospital he was angry how little money was spent on cancer research in Canada. He turned his anger into a mission he would run across the country to raise both awareness and money for his fight against cancer.1) Others who had suffered were also never forgotten in the eyes of Terry. He deiced to stand up for others and for him to raise awareness for cancer. “That's the thing about cancer. I'm not the only one. It happens all the time, to other people. I'm not special. This just intensifies what I did. It gives it more meaning. It'll inspire more people. I could have sat on my rear end, I could have forgotten what I'd seen in the hospital, but I didn't.”2 He decided to run across the country and give the public knowledge and understanding about this fatal disease. This is what he intended to do and he did exactly that. (He averaged 43 km (26 miles) per day, and as he progressed across six provinces in Canada, the image of a solitary young man running slowly on an artificial leg drew increasing attention from newspapers and television.3 ) Terry Fox’s name is known world wide and is an image in the hopeful eyes of citizens suffering from cancer. Terry deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame because of the inspiration and faith he gave to millions of Canadians and people worldwide.

Terry’s mission achieved awareness for cancer and inspired millions of people but also he raised millions of dollars. Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame because he raised money for cancer research pushing it forward and giving hope to many. When Terry started his Marathon of Hope he had a dream. His dream was to collect one dollar form every Canadian. During this time Canada’s population was 24 million showing it would be no easy feat. (Terry’s dream was realized on February 1981: the marathon of hope raised $24.1 million for cancer research.2) This progressed even after Terry had died. (On Sept. 13, 1981, the first Terry Fox Run was held. More than 300,000 Canadians took part in the event at 760 sites across the country. The run raised $3.5 million. The Terry Fox Run is a family affair for the Foxes.1) This event goes on annually to this date and now Terry Fox has raised more money then he could have ever dreamed of. (To date, more than $360 million has been raised worldwide for cancer research in Terry's name through the annual Terry Fox Run, held across Canada and around the world.22) Terry was the start of something bigger than he could ever imagine. Terry’s efforts raised millions and have boosted cancer research greatly earning him the right to be in the Canadian hall of fame.

Mr. Fox raised millions but he also proved to people that anything is possible. Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame because He showed great dedication and determination towards his cause and proved that anything is possible if you believe.. Tarry was a marvelous example of what is possible with determination and dedication. Even before his run he showed unmatchable dedication. (Terry trained for 15 months, running 3,159 miles, running until his stump was raw and bleeding, running every day for 101 days, until he could run 23 miles a day.2) His determination was shown greatly through his run proving people wrong and breaking many barriers. He'd start before dawn every morning, running in shorts and a T-shirt printed with a map of Canada. He wasn't ashamed of his disability. Terry ran about 42 kilometers each day no matter the weather – freezing rain, high winds, even snow. Skeptics thought he'd never make it past New Brunswick but he proved them wrong.1 He was a hero. (He'd run through six provinces and now was two-thirds of the way home. He'd run close to a marathon a day, for 143 days. No mean achievement for an able-bodied runner, an extraordinary accomplishment for an amputee.2 Terry Fox has proved too many what dedication and determination can do he has helped many along the way thus he should be accepted into the Canadian hall of fame.

need help with conclusion
 
not gonna lie, didnt read anything. just responding cause your new and a pink name. so whats up sexy?
 
^everything you have on your little box is hilarious. From your post, to your signatures. What a better day this has become
 
here ill make it easy for u ppl

this is the thesis statment

Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame. Terry was a man who despite having cancer and having to amputate his leg ran across Canada to raise money for cancer research. Terry raised awareness of cancer and inspired millions of Canadians and people worldwide. He raised money for cancer research pushing it forward and giving hope to many. Terry Fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame. His great dedication and determination towards this cause proved that anything is possible if you simply believe.

the conclusion is a restatment of thesis (summary of arguments) and a "so what" sentence
 
does canada have a hall of fame, and if so whou would be in it. Mike myers? The guy that made the maple leaf flag?
 
bahaha but yeah for running across canada with 1 leg to raise awareness for cancer and money to help people...yeah he should prob be in the fame
 
when you say canadians all around the world... do you mean there are canadians that arent in canada?
 
you say this and alterations of this too much:

Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian hall of fame.

and try to switch up how you structure your sentences. don't always start with his name, or even use his name. and don't be afraid to have long sentences with semi-colon's in them. write it like you would want to say it if it was a speech.
 
look there is nothing u can personally do bout it

if u truly care bout mr. fox, u could probably make a petition that people could sign in order to recognize his efforts

id sign it
 
fuck i read all that just to find out you need help with a conclusion

well at least ive educated myself on specific statistics about terry fox, in a way.

reading that to "crime of the century" was inspiring.
 
To restate your argument in your conclusion is weak and indicitive of basic high school writing. Im suprised its not in 5 paragraph form. Pull on some emotional heart strings in the conclusion, maybe extend some of your main points in your conclusion, alude to something greater.

Or you could be boring and just restate all the crap you just said.
 
"Terry fox deserves to be in the Canadian"

You say that 3 or 4 times, I know that is the point you are making but is there anyway you could re-word it rather then repeating the same sentence.

Pritty good paper though. I always assumed that Terry would be in the Canadian Hall of Fame.
 
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