nice edit man! i did enjoy it.
-trim your clips more.  we don't need to see so much ride up/ride away-showing multiple people hitting the same feature is usually sloppy and is really hard to do well. avoid it.  -only use the REALLY good shots.  if a shot is questionable (too far away, shaky, sketchy, etc.) cut it.  short and sweet is always better than long and iffy.  -work on color grading a little bit to bring the best out of those gloomy days.  -if you're shooting with an HD camera, make sure your project is HD and make sure you're exporting in HD.