Please vote for me

done, i tried to read it but it didnt flow with the beat of the song im listening to so i couldnt do it haha
 
I'll give you a 10 too, always good to help another nser out

I didn't really get the "I saw the see and have seen the shore" line cause it didn't really seem to have much to do with giving greatness to the poor?

also rythem maybe spelt wrong?
 
ive saw the see and have seen the shore

the ocean is great and the shore is debrees built up from the ocean its a bunch of things that didn't really make it and ended up washed up, so its poor

and ya theres prob alot of errors
 
i gave it a nine, since i am not a natural speaker, i cant really tel how good it is, but i sounds good when you read it, so 9
 
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