Paper enhancement thread

[JacheOReally]

I am currently typing a paper for my brit lit class and I thought of somthing, a website that turns your dull sentences into somthing better!

So here it goes, if you need a sentence to be reworded to give the sense you might be intelligent, post it here, and have the smarties on NS give you a new super sentence that will drop the readers jaws to their desks!

so someone help me out:



During the first World War, the world was losing many of its men each day.

- This sentence doesn't work in my paper because it makes me sound like I'm 12.

 

[JacheOReally]

Shit, move this to NSG

 

[ski-swagga]

In WWI, millions of young men shed blood for their countries. (not extremely better but reworded haha)

 

[AlexF]

The first Great War of 1914-1918 was one of attrition. The overriding characteristic of its progression was the depletion of the resources of both sides at an unsustainable rate. The expenditure of capital and natural resources took an enormous toll on the waring parties. However, it was the unprecedented expense in human lives that marked out the brutality of the conflict and had the greatest effect on the world.

 

[cbeebzthasteeze]

You deserve an e-cookie.

 

[pmw]

dude your fucking stupid

 

[oreopancake.]

you're*

 

[Obsessedwski]

Really. That was the best you could come up with?

 

[pmw]

oh em ge, its liek i totally didnt notise tat. gash nao i fele so stewpid, my grammar was wrong in duh intermanets

 

[cbeebzthasteeze]

"OMG, it's like I totally didn't notice that. Gosh, now I feel so stupid, my grammar was wrong on the internet."

 

[mer-man]

thread/

 

[mer-man]

thread/

 

[RockyMountnHigh]

*Oh my God, its like I totally didn't notice that. Gosh, now I feel so stupid, my grammer was wrong on the internet.*

 

[oreopancake.]

"Oh my God, it's like I totally didn't notice that. Gosh, now I feel so stupid, my grammar was wrong on the internet."

 

[pianoman]

+k