Newschoolers, im in need of help

good editing, i was gonna suggest getting read of "I feel I have expressed myself contently and thoroughly" because the wording didn't make much sense, but you beat me too it.
 
dude if you give that to your parents it will make them realize whats really goin on and they will eventually come around
 
considering it sounds like you put more time and effort into that paper than i have in any paper in my life i would have to let you go just based on effort. but besides that you made some strong arguments and unless your parents are real dickheads or you were totally bullshitting their going to have to let you go.
 
I feel your pain man, I live in maine and have never skiied off the east coast and I managed to convince my parents to let me go on a trip to whistler or feb vacation, just keep at it and I think the letter has potential, make sure you serious about it and show your responsibility, dont fuck up before the trip or you'll hear a lot of shit, good luck!
 
hit up moonstone instead. its sick in march, nice and soft, probably a better park than anything cept tremblant, but ive not skiied tremblant or anything else in quebec in a while, so i cant say
 
I know exactly how u feel...... belieeve me....

but when I was 16, I was only allowed to drive to school and back pretty much. they kept tabs on the the miles on my car to make sure i wasnt going anywhere i shouldnt...... ur lucky they let u drive to the mall by urself
 
DOOD the last sentence of the first paragrapah is still sketchy DONT give it to them like that. you sound like an ass from their perspective. ive done this before im just trying to help you not make my mistake.
 
what u need to do is to tell them phone numbers and adresses. let them talk to andrew so they can see how responsible he is
 
you forgot to put a comma after the word "however" in that one sentence that starts the paragraph....

just kidding around

i think it will work, but dont make it too obvious that your trying to act all well rounded and shit.... so dont deal with the personal experience.......just leave it as REASONS YOU SHOULD LET ME GO.........
 
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