I thought your editing was really good! If it was you filming, I think you could try to set up the shot to better represent the action, and make it more aesthetically pleasing ... The shot at 1:17 is an example where imo you could be in a better position, but I realize it was indoors and places where you could stand are probably limited. Also there was a bit of motion blur in a lot of shots which detracted from the edit. I thought the filming was good, but could have been better. Overall I thought you did a great job, but you could consider your shots more carefully to make it even better.