pretty sick man. theres a lot going on, but i really like it for some reason. the exposure on the lawn is cool too. what was the iso and shutterspeed and aperature?
nat bad for 1st one. You need a focal point though. A picture with long exposure still has to abide by some basic photography rules
this is one i took last summer.
Just keep trying stuff out. Look somewhere that you'd normally take a picture in the daytime, and take it with a long exposure at night. It might turn out amazing.