Fear poem

Wrote this last night i like it thought some skiers out there might

Insert Fear

Clouds bursting here full of that pure fear

Shakes in ripe young pain of years

Spent on my knees to look up at trees

Afterwards this old mirror of cracked white

Quakes these old glass lakes full of solid fate

Chalked with tomorrows, and the night skies she borrows

Under former wistful thoughts of days draughts

These forsaken walls lined with dead men’s cots

Bright fights uncurled, shook the world, spun and whirled

Journeys half endings should be furthered forward

With thoughts of limping lights and days afterward

We were shot to be taught of caramelized fights fought

Comedic fatalities with sheer malevolent fear

As roses fall and blossoming from white is one last tear

From the fallow frame of a body buffed and shined for fame

Chattering teeth of the shattered glass

End this game with one last hopeless pass

Insert my darkest fears to the right inside here

 
damn, nice, deep.

-Logan

'Get pissed. DESTROY'-Seth

'You are only limited by fear, and even that you can overcome'-Seth

'It's Totally Doable!'-Shane McConkey

'Oh shit. Did i sound like a dork when i was crashing?'-Shane McConkey
 
thanks guys, been trying to write about fear for awhile, just finally got it, must have been that 40fter i hit this weekend and ruined myself on

 
nice. We should start a poetry thread or somethin

...For I have dined on honey dew and drunk the milk of paradise. --------------------I like to jam

 
nice dude .. anyone who says anything bad about this should be shot

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Strode420's response to lilgreen's post about cigarettes and the TRUTH organization: ...you probably light the filter and still smoke the whole thing because you are such a stupid fuck.....go lay in a bear trap

^priceless

GEORGE BUSH

Like a rock......

Only dumber.

 
awsome man i wish i could write like that major props

thatd make a sweet song too...

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One truly finds himself on razors edge seperating his genius from his sanity.

 
amazing. But i found one rhyme that was repetative: Bright fights uncurled, shook the world, spun and whirled. you used world and whirled, which both sound the same and as you read it, it sounds wierd. Maybe try like twirled. But other than that, damn, fucking amazing. I can't write worth shit.

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SkeeOrDie: I don\'t hate boarders, I hate fuckers, and 8-year olds that call everyone nigger face.
 
thanks again, i see what your talking about with that line, it was hard cause i was trying to make the last line in every stanza ryme three times, but twirled would have worked good

 
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