Critique this

[mTRUTH]

https://www.newschoolers.com/membervideo/682106.0/Dirty-30---Ian-Boo?s=172398&t=6&o=8

Help a brotha out, tips and pointers are always welcome.

 

[cyberginger]

Not a huge fan of the Black and White, Could of faded in and out better.

Pretty good, 7/10

 

[Lou.]

Skiing was decent. I wasn't a fan of the black and white. And you made no attempt at fading out. But it wasn't terrible. Just keep pumpin out edits getting better each time. It's just like skiing. Progression is everything

 

[SeanTom]

skiing was good but holy shit what is this a guillotine?

b&w was nifty but just really flat, liked the song choice.

filming was a little shaky.

 

[bigbromskier]

if you're just going for 30 seconds, which is a fun concept, make those 30 seconds so good I wanna watch it over and over. that doesn't mean throw in as many shots as possible. quality over quantity.

there were so many shots of mediocre stuff that none of it stuck. try taking out your least favorites and working on some filler shots and transitions so you actually have time to comprehend what's going on. choose your best/favorite shots and use some location/context to back them up.

 

[bigbromskier]

i'm not saying your edit has to be like this, but this edit has one more shot than yours and is 6 times longer. and it's sick: http://vimeo.com/71455489 . and it's top rated.

just some food for thought.

 

[zsturtevant]

More fillers, and IMO you should make those shots longer so it doesn't just change to the next shot right after he lands.