Critique my promo video for Hosmer Point Summer Camp

[jeb_b_vt]

Hey i just made this promotional video for a camp i went to last year. Can you critique it? https://vimeo.com/46447746

 

[gusestomp]

Hosmer Point from No Matter Productions on Vimeo.

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[SSteezle]

not bad man. I'd personally get rid of the shot of the Mud, and the shot of the pigs playing in the mud. Sure, baby pigs are cute, but they're playing in mud which is pretty gross and it's not something that you'd go to a summer camp to see. Besides that it seemed you captured most of the "fun" things that go on there. Maybe get some good audio to throw in the background to capture the vibe a bit more