Critique my Instrumental

i dig it. i would attempt to form a response more thoughtful than that...but i really...i just dig it.
 
yeah same. its almost as if they were a little off key or off beat. but i really liked the thing that came after the chimes
 
Word, the chimes didn't really fit in with the rest. I kind of liked the timbre of the chimes, but they didn't flow- it was sort of a hodgepodge of notes. Or they were too off-beat. One of the two.
The repeating synth throughout the entire song is waaaay to obvious. It should vary in volume, and flow together easier- it stops and starts abruptly even though it flows through the notes nicely.
The synthetic clap during the breakdown didn't do it for me- really... fake. The corny keyboard and riding bass line was dope-- the ringing bass should continue into the last chorus/verse. The bridge between the the breakdown and last chorus/verse also needs a little more... try double-time with the bass and snare, cut-up voice.
Other than that, it was pretty catchy.

 
that helps a ton, thanks +++karma

btw I did this in garageband in 3 hours, part of the reason the instruments are lacking. can't get my board working with Live. once again Apples simplicity just works haha.
 
Word, garageband is fun to mess around with. Experiment with the filters to get some cool un-stock sounds.
 
there needs to be some variation. the string section and the kit are repeated ad nauseam. the one break down seemed awkward and sandwiched in between the same little phrases. just because it's a somber piece doesn't mean there should be no movement.
 
yeah I liked it as many others said dropping the chimes is a good idea. Oh and make it downloadable that would be sick.
 
werd dude thats pretty illz. instead of taking out the bells maybe just have it lower. and if u add compressor on to all the tracks and the master, i bet u'll like the results. if u set it right it'll make the kick thump into the melody kinda sounding like it's bending down the sound. hard to explain but if u fool around with it u'll know what i mean
 
I actually liked the chimes...I think if you take them out there won't be enough contrast. Also, the "wrong" note in the chimes I sorta like as well.

I think you should perhaps do some different chord progressions in the eighth notes played over the background chords and bass. I guess I was just a little bored with the same thing over again.

Also, maybe if you had a synth solo over the last part it would be cool. Probably wouldn't fit with what you're trying to accomplish though.

Overall, I thought it was pretty good (especially for 3 hours). Keep up the good work.
 
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