1 minute intro with no landed tricks was pretty boring, if they were super gnarly bails maybe it wouldn't have been an issue but really not worth watching.
the fisheye with 50% of the screen in black didn't really work, if you are going to use a fisheye that has some vignetting make sure you are very close to the subject, it works best shooting from a low angle like how alot of older skate vids are shot, if you are far away the subject gets lost in the shot and it is hard to figure out whats going on.
try not to have so many repeated shots. there were tons of back 2s and back swaps out of flat rails, cut it down to 1 or 2 of the best/cleanest ones and make the edit shorter.
play with colour correcting to make sure shots look similar, it'll make the shots flow better into eachother and generally make it more aesthetically pleasing.