Bunch of new music by me. please critique/support/do wtf you want

SirFryanator

SirFryanator

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If you don't like hip-hop then don't say "zomg ur wite lolz u cant rap" because...well that's not really contributing anything haha

But if you have any suggestions for me on how to improve quality (treble, bass, mids, etc.), flow/beats, or what kind of songs I should maybe think about doing next, definitely give it a shot.

Or if you love NPG, do your thing!

-Matt
 
Matt, your beats are filthy, but i think you could use a better mic, it's got some static & stuff. also, i think it'd sound better if you rapped a little louder it would sound better. not in the sense that you could change the volume of the vocals vs. the beat, but your voice sounds a little shaky if you rap too soft.

 
i thought your beats were pretty sick.. but i wasn't a fan of the way you rapped/sang/talked, it was to plain.. it kinda took away from the lyrics..
 
Your beats are super sick and your lyrics are alright but you need to stop sounding like a skinny white boy. Your "gangsta accent" sounds fake, and your voice isn't... low or full enough, and your don't really have enough... what do you call it... assertiveness? Anger? Oomph?
 
the beats are really good. i agree, you should move a bit farther back from the mic and speak louder, your voice needs more "sustain". theres a lot of mastering you could do to the tracks, maybe compress the voice and bring up the beats. thats the hardest part though.
 
alright. I'll definitely work on more variance in the voice. just wondering...are you guys getting this from just one song? or are you listening to a few?
 
dude, dope lyrics, sick beats. but you need to let your nuts hang a bit man with your voice. you sound like your holding back. like get a little louder like you mean it. Pretend there isn't a mic right there and let it out a bit, then tune it back if you need to. other wise this shits dope.
 
Sounds like your sitting in a La-Z boy as you rap. be more aggressive with your voice
 
like everyone else said your lyrics and beats were sick but its almost as if your voice lacked emotion or something and i felt like you read the words straight off the paper. dont get me wrong though your voice does sound like it has potential (mine doesnt what so ever) but you just have to be more into it next time you record. drink like 10 redbulls or something
 
Super sick beats but like everyone said your voice seems a little too plain... just a little more emotion and I think you'll have it. The voice in 'on fire' seemed better but it could still be a little richer. Overall super dope though.
 
the beat for the second song was fucking ill, options i think it was called. the lyrics were good on that too but like everyone is saying you really gotta spit harder, listen to the best in the game right now and see how they really are aggressive and shit, you sound like anticon or buck 65 as opposed to brother ali orrr lupe fiasco, which is ok but it doesnt work with your voice well. SPIT HOT FIYA!
 
yeah dude. twix1882 or something like that on NS made that beat. so big props to him!

so are you saying I should change my style to more like lupe?
 
good news and bad news

good news- good beats

bad news- rymes are weak and need a lot of working on

untill you get your rhymes better just stick to making beats like Ratatat, there song Loud Pipes is a good example.

PS you dont need to say Nextgeneration on each track only your single or elese its kinda dumb and i gets very repeatative

over all good job
 
You just sound too white. Not just white, but stereotypical nerdy kid white. Like when black comedians impersonate white people white.
 
I just listened to rising rhythm and it was much better in this respect. But like everyone else said, you gotta be louder, it sounds like your trying to quietly rap or some shit.
 
beats are really good, rising rhythms fucking sick, but just liek everyones been saying just work on voice, keep it up though, good shit
 
thanks drew. loving it.

also, I got a new song up that I really worked on getting the "memorable voice" in there. check it out. the song is called "flip it"
 
yea your music is pretty good other than what everyone else is saying about your voice. it just kinda sounds like youre just talking to yourself on the mic. you should sound louder and more confident
 
shits getten better that song is def a lil louder, but it still sounds like ur not tryen to throw down and still being quite like ur in ur room but you can't rap to loud or ur mom will here u or something.

i think when ur rappen ur rappen to ur computer rather then rappen to the world
 
dude, if you serious about this you need to take singing lessons to improve your delivery and flow, which suck.

Your voice doesn't have to be more aggressive, but it just has to be more full and you need to learn breath patterns, grace notes, cadences, etc.

btw I'm not like an mc or dj or anything I just listen to a ton of hip hop.
 
word that explains it pretty well, i aint no rapper or anything so it's kinda hard to explain how to rap better. but ya that pretty much sums it up
 
ill beats, however you still remind me of when my best friends try and sing along to gansta beats on the radio on our way up to the mountain.... you got heart, know all the words, and your almost dead on key.... but jus to white to make it work
to solve this simple do lots of defferent drungs... worked for eminem
haha jk jk
 
yeah matt, im not saying try to sound more like lupe, but take more from that style of music, the top of the hip hop game right now is almost all guys who are spitting hard and fast, dont try to sound like anyone....but if you get more aggressive you will sound less like a little white kid and more like someone who knows what he is doing.
 
Everyone else pretty much nailed it. Even in the new one. Drink Jack Daniels, blow some lines, then record. I'm not normally a cocaine advocate but you need some energy, and the Jack will erase your inhibitions, and then you might get some sick songs.
 
BE YOURSELF, to the fullest and that

Be confident when you rhyme, do it with your heart, I don't know if you read your lines while recording, but if so, not doing that might help, use your voice as an instrument, people should be entertained just by hearing the patterns, speed and pitch variations of the words you say, and then when they'll hear the lyrics you'll have yourself some pretty solid tracks

 
rising rhythm has a sick beat. it sounds like you need to be more passionate about your rhymes if that makes sense, like try to get more into it
 
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