Beginning new song - critique plzzz lolz

[SirFryanator]

Actually, I need to get this song really good before I go any further. First one I've recorded all summer...I can re-record with a better mic if the quality is terrible but it's really just for a demo LP. Thanks.

http://media.putfile.com/flip-it-beginning

 

[SirFryanator]

dabump

 

[K2skipunk]

its sick, but u definitely have an interesting voice. good beat, original lyrics, overall, its pretty neat

 

[[Adam]]

dope song but the piano doesn't seem to fit the song maybe try replacing it with a bass beat.

 

[Mooose...]

i thought it was pretty good. good voice good lyrics, the beat was just alright for me, could add some bass or something.

 

[sHrEdAgE]

pretty sick i thought but ya wat every1 else is saying u do need sum bass in it

 

[E.C.]

yup bass needed but still sick

 

[Sideways_Shane]

"since im only 17 an white spittin this track"

money niggaaa

 

[Alex_G]

good shit fry, you are starting to sound really solid man!

 

[SirFryanator]

thanks alex

 

[SirFryanator]

longtime bump

 

[inactive]

ditch the piano, please

 

[WillStart]

its sounding pretty good matt, the one thing i would say is in a few spots, mainly the beginning, you might want to try slowing down the delivery a little bit, just to fill up some small gaps. i dont know if that would actually work but seems like maybe it might

 

[duckets.]

you're not a slut just because you have wide-set beats and a heavy flow...

 

[statuswhitegirl]

softer piano with a matching bass beat, and turn up your voice, it was a little quite

 

[SirFryanator]

 

[Hansel.]

it would b sweet if when the piano comes in you keep the same beat like the da da da but like play the song on the united arlines comerical

 

[2+2=5]

your voice seems like it hasnt fully developed yet. you should wait a few months, or years

 

[SirFryanator]

yeahhhh it'll happen. If you saw me you'd think I'm 15...