Vote for my essay to help me get a scholarship please!

As an emerging presence as a writing resource within the NS community, I decided to take five minutes and edit this essay. I hope the OP will not take offense. Here is my polished version of what he submitted:
StartFragmentThroughout life, many people set aside their hobbies and interests, replacing them with work. Through my personalobservations, I have noted that people who make this tradeoff are less likelyto be happy. People who have achieved a healthy balance between work and playare more fun to be around, and happier in all aspects of their daily lives. I have taken my observations, reflections, and personalinteractions and channeled them in a way that is applicable to my dailyroutine. I go to school every day, work hard, and am met with success. Tobalance this dedication, I engage in a host of enjoyable outdoor activities,ranging from rock climbing to skiing. I utilize my free time effectively,achieving a balance between homework and personal leisure. I have found that byeliminating stress I am able to better function, live a happier life, and ammore fun to be around. My advice to others would be that having fun is of theutmost importance, but make certain to maintain a healthy balance. Moderationis key.EndFragment
 
If you are referring to my edited version, I will explain. I took what he wrote and polished it. I made it easier to read, more professional, and cleaned up several errors. I stayed consistent with what he wrote, keeping it within the assigned parameters. I did not re-write it, I merely edited it. If you compare what he wrote with what I posted, you will see that his work is all there, in a slightly better format. The essay (or answer to the question) is still his. I did not answer it myself.
 
I just noticed that when copy/pasting from Word it lost my formatting. The spacing between words was of course correct in the original version.
 
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