It's very long. A lot if the shots could easily be cut. The start for example with the guy getting out of the car, you could cut that down a lot show it in maybe 5 secs. You have to remember your trying to sell yourself. The people watching it will be viewing a lot of reels so you need to show just your best work. I would really cut a lit of that out. Also generally if you have no professional, ie studio work, keep it under 2 mins, if you have pro work, big films ect you can take it to 3 min. Yours at 4 mins is about twice as long as it should be. Most employers would not bother to watch it all so they miss some of your best work.