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hucker22

hucker22

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so i just want some input, im writing some rap stuff for maybe gettin a band to do this thing at my school where u have bands from school play during lunch in the upper commons. so hows this sound?

i dream of angles, devils, and crazy monster makers/dream of 12 loaves of bread wake up and kill the baker/then invest in 40thousand acres/i buried your daughter under one, go grab a shovel dig her up and save her/the prodigal son is back back at it again/flowing with the skill of 7 deadly sins/into karma, powered by gin/i live 7 deadly lives which one am i in?/you ask if hell were on earth would i be hot again?/so talk to say, plead with him/ask him to make it stop/hes says why are u asking me? ask your virgin mary womb occupant/only church steeples now can save you/but u dont understand him thanx to the godawful tower of babel/now your heads unstable, and spin with loose ends/powered by money, fame, power, and one sultry vixen/so so if this is how your life story goes/bend over to the front and touch your toes

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r u white?

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i guess it reads ok, kinda had some trouble finding when it rymed and how it flowed

Woman are like rocks; Skip the flat ones

HIGH NORTH SESSION 2 AND 3

-COLORADO-

 
yeah man, seriously. what the hell do you mean by a band?

[/i][/b][/u]-Harvie

keep it real,

payce

'the fucksin shipmni fucking farae!!'
 
so so if this is how your life story goes/bend over to the front and touch your toes

I love it.

Stay Classy Newschoolers
 
^^ yes he's definitely white, hes probably a freaking gothic sadistic fag that thinks hes cool. YOU SUCK AT RAP DONT EVEN ATTEMPT ANYMORE. that was the most garbage rhyme i have ever read...whats worse is your ass trying to spit it

 
yo chill the fuck out kidz. lets hear u drop some rhymes better than that gmack24

Woman are like rocks; Skip the flat ones

HIGH NORTH SESSION 2 AND 3

-COLORADO-

 
kinda dumb idea. i bet you go to a private all white school with a golf course.

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whats the beat?? also you should out in you better get some kneepads, cause your gunna be sucking some ehavy dick tongiht. hahahaha

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A tall, well built women with good

reputation, who can cook frog

legs, who appreciates a good fuc-

shia garden, classical music and tal-

king without getting too serious.

But please only read lines 1, 3, and 5
 
ya band, kinda like the roots, with real drums and shit. and my style is inspired by aesop rock, cuz im white, so im not gonna rap about shooting niggers. well ok so no one liekd it?

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put on whatever makes you attractive

if it's not you then do it for the sake of fashion

your friends like a certain you

that's who you've got to be
 
i agree that it read ok. im not much of a rap guy, but u wanna explain the meaning? heh

Jeepers Creepers, where'd you get the neat sneakers?!?!

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well there isnt really a beat, cuz i was gonna go all accapella style on it, but i can set it to a beat, its better when i rap it, its hard to read the beat and stuff.

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put on whatever makes you attractive

if it's not you then do it for the sake of fashion

your friends like a certain you

that's who you've got to be
 
it reads alright, it seems to me that you are trying to hard to go into something you dont know much about..u try to do rhymes like jedi mind but your topics are bouncing from place to place...that would sick to have a band tho instead of just using a straight beat to rap to..cause the Roots are amazing and one of my favorite bands all time..it will be hard tho to find guitarists and keyboardists especially to be into the same thing..

okayplayer. giving you true notes since 1987

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yea i could definitely tell you got your style from aesop rock, but lets be realistic...aesop is a freaking wierdo. ill restate my opinion that you suck at rap and just shouldnt embarass anyone at your school.

white lyricists don't need to have such wierd rhymes man, look at the high and mighty or the rugged man...

 
dude you suck, sorry to be so harsh, but that will just make every one laugh at you. maybe you should try writing rymes to dis people it was easier. i cant rhyme but even I can do that.

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try rhyming less words, until you break into a flow. good luck at this so called show. hope you dont break your neck when your getting your ass thrown out the window. by someguys who eat you and spit you out. but dont go and shout all your lyrics. when you heard this youll probably say this guys a white boy, but man im just a decoy. word

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ladies man cult WHAT
 
^ now thats good. at first I did not realize it was a rhyme.

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You need to add this to the last line:

Bend over to the front and touch your toes/ And bitch ill show you where the wild goose goes

'Idle hands spend time at the genitals, and you know how much God hates that' - Ol' Drippy
 
seemed like you were trying for a jedi mind tricks style

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i dont think my school would allow some of those words lol o well, its not too bad, like some1 said it jumps around about diff things wut is it exactly about or supposed to mean

 
so u sugguest i go all gansta style?

put on yo hat g/put on yo white tee/put on yo khacki/put on yo nikes/yo yo thats how the story goes/head sholders knees and toes/

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put on whatever makes you attractive

if it's not you then do it for the sake of fashion

your friends like a certain you

that's who you've got to be
 
i love chinks and towel heads, and niggers the best/cuz they always straped with them bullet proff vests/it makes em hard to kill/so im a tricky bastard slip em working pills/that will make em die/how bout u get out of my unemployment line/cuz i need my money fo drugs/maybe ill steal you little sister cell phone an lugz/cuz im a gansta black hater/but i still cant find a better grits and fired chicken maker

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put on whatever makes you attractive

if it's not you then do it for the sake of fashion

your friends like a certain you

that's who you've got to be
 
why are you writing this shit? I guess everybody knows that rap is for oppressed upper middle class suburban white kids. WTF

To love the times we have
To like what makes us sad
To live when others die
To lose and say goodbye
To last until our moment comes
 
'Zall Jibberish, it doesnt mean anything when you read it, but i guess when youre singing it it has a ryhthym, or talking it

 
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