Poem interpretation

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plaire

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what do you guys take from this?

Under

The Water



I

know you can’t always see under the water,

Or

know how far to go be for you stop.

But

you didn’t even see that shape bellow you,

Or

feel the slicing of your prop.



This

manatee’s back will heal

But

there will be a scar.

So

I need you to hold onto that

As

you continue being “just who you are.”

 
something about a red wheelbarrow.... i can't quite put my mind on it.. might involve some white chickens as well.....
 
not sure if serious... but yes i wrote it, i want to see if it makes sense to other people without context. what are your thoughts?
 
in all seriousness though this poem just shouted watch out for manatees

it was good

here are some tips i used all the time -

try different rhyming schemes like aabb, abba, aaba and you could also try to lengthen the poem

look up rhyming dictionaries, and don't ever build a poem around rhyming, rhyme your poem around what you are trying to say. try not rhyming, try longer stanzas, altering your line lengths, try a long line followed by a short line that rhymes with the next line like this

A(long line)

A(long line)

B(short line)

B(long line)

basically, get creative
 
yeah if the manatee is just a metaphor don't devote half your poem to it

in a poem of that length you can't really include very many metaphors without them seeming like the subject of the poem, so try to just make it longer
 
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