Murry do you wanna? aka the best story ever told on new schoolers part 1

JakeAssBeatClap

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So there's this guy murry. He has a best friend named Al. Als dad owned a bar down town called Key Hall's Bar , al was the typical best friend, you can love him, hate him, party with him, and get sick cuz of him but no matter how tired you may think you are of him you always go back. He was his best friend.. It's a saturday night they're about to go to the dubstep show. Al has already been drinking and he asks hey Murry wanna call up some bitches to go to the show tonight. Murry was like hell yeah. Al started calling bitches and murry was like i wanna take Lucy. let me call her. Al already a little drunk says "Murry wanna take lucy cuz her ass id so good." They chuckled then continued searching for bitches. And while Al was on the phone with the very sexy very chill Coco Dean. All the guys liked coco she was relaxed fun to be around but black guys really liked her, and boy did she like her black guys. Al knew he didn't have a chance but he just loves being around her. while looking through his phone to find lucy's contact Murry saw his exs number. They broke up only a month earlier and he was sad about it still, he loved the way she made him feel sooo good and soo in love with everything. His ex, Stacy, was the queen of the scene and all the guys and even girls wanted her. Murry knew everyone would wanna be taking her to the show tonight, he knew he would see her. But he put it out of his mind and called Lucy. Lucy was a strange girl and sometimes made murry uncomfortable and nervous but he would always chill out around her and he would have the best times he can remember. Everytime the two met up it was like a match made in heaven. Lucy and murry. But they didn't communicate well lucy was kinda hard to read. Their conversation went like this.
M- Lucy! Hey its murry, wanna go with me and al to the show tonight?L-Uhm yeah i'm down this place i'm at has a weird vibe when can we meet up?M- come by the house when you canL- i'm gunna take about an hour to come on over though.M- well just call me then when you can.L- yeah ok.M- well ok then i'm excited to see youL- me too! I can't wait tonight will be a great time see you soon byeclick...m- bye then.

"Murry wanna hit up the Ocksey bitches" asked Al. Ocksey was the town over from the guys and the girls there were dangerous. But in a sneaky way. They were the rich kids always had the freshest clothes and seemed the sweetest but they partied harder than most. The conton sisters were always a good duo to have by when you wanted to party. They stole money from their parents wallet and brought the fun pills from their parents cabinets. They always wanted to have fun and wanted to go crazy all the time. And if murry and al didn't fuck anyone else tonight they'd definitely be able to fuck the conton girls then send them back home to their houses with out even feeling guilty.
Murry and al heard a knock on the front door so they went down to get it. They had been waiting for him for thirty minutes. It was the third musketeer of their small group of friends, Sill, (all his friends called him sill-o on account of he always carried an O on him) Sill-o was one weird kid, never able to focus always all over the place he wore a lot of tie dye too. WHich was just strange. But they loved his weird ass like a brother, and he was just getting off being grounded for a month when he came home three weeks ago wasted after a party and he wanted to go out and rage tonight to celebrate.
How did Mrs. Siben take the thought of you going to the show tonight? asked murry
man, she was not chill she freaked out at me man. Asking me to callher every hour. Theres no way that'll happen.

TO BE CONTINUED
TO BE CONTINUED
 
I like how there's a clear and well thought out story line that doesn't read as if a 13 year old wrote it
 
Ok so I was putting it lightly. It was pretty terrible. But he can redeem himself with part 2
 
To be completely honest I'm waiting for a big finish too. I gotta sit here at work for 4 more hours and have no more Internet to discover
 
Hahahah yeah the writing is no bueno i agree but it's way more intelligent and creative than you think you just gotta dig into the story a little deeper really figure it out you know?
part 2 will be soon.
 
And part two will deliver! I promise! Sorry prozach but it'll be tomorrow so i can't keep ya busy during work but it will drop and it will be worth your time. It will also be written better. I had to introduce our characters but now i can start the story. Tears will fall, blood will be spilt, and someone will have sex with three people. AT THE SAME TIME!!! Who will it be? FIND OUT next time on MURRY DO YOU WANNA?
 
what really sucks about this story is that even though it was shit you know you have to readp pt. 2 anyways to see if your not dissapointed even though we most likely will be... i think the title is a cliff hanger itsself
 
PART TWO!
So i'm not going to write part two. BUT i will explain why the story is a little smarter than you may think.
THE CHARACTERS ARE DRUGS!!!!
what? what are you talking about jake they're people, you're crazy dude.
WATCH.
Al murry's best friend has a dad who owns a bar downtown called Key Hall's Bar.
Al's last name is Keyhall. Get it? Al Keyhall say it out loud... alcohol.
also when describing Al's character i state "you can love him, hate him, party with him, and get sick cuz of him but no matter how tired you may think you are of him you always go back"
Meaning you can love alcohol when you get laid because of it, hate it when you drink to much and feel like crap, party with it because its alcohol, and get sick because itll make you sick. AND no matter how shitty you feel the next day and say i'm never drinking agan you do any way.
also al is the only one who is drinking so far in the story
Ok thats Al.
Murry is marijuana. It doesn't include his last name but frequently after his name is said in the story it's followed by wanna. Ex: "he asks hey Murry wanna call up some bitches""already a little drunk says "Murry wanna take""Hey its murry, wanna"""Murry wanna hit up the "There may be a couple more but say Murry wanna out loud... sounds a lot like marijuana right? good.
Now onto the conton twins from ocksey. They're rich and they sneak into their parents cabinet for drugs and still their parents cash. That is the typical oxycontin user get it The conton sisters from Ocksey. Ocksey Conton?. Oxycontin. Boom. The story says the girls are dangerous. They're also sluts.
A small character only mentioned on the phone was Coco Dean." All the guys liked coco she was relaxed fun to be around but black guys really liked her, and boy did she like her black guys" She was relaxing and fun to be around. And black guys love her. This one i honestly thought would give the whole drug message away. Coco Dean is Codeine. Aka purple drink which is rapped about in countless rap songs written by black folk who love to sip it.
Their friend Sill-o the odd kid always wearing tie dye who is "all over the place all the time" He got grounded by his mom mrs siben. sill-o siben. Psilocybin the chemical in mushrooms that makes you trip. Sill- o is mushrooms.
Now onto Lucy. Another character who I thought would give away the story because her name is the slang name for acid. When al is drunk he says to murry. " let me call her. Al already a little drunk says "Murry wanna take lucy cuz her ass id so good." They chuckled"
Now see that? murry wanna take lucy cuz her ass id so good. not a typo on my behalf but rather a drunken slur made by the character Al. Her ass id so good. Ass id... Acid?
also the story says that murry and her are a match made in heaven. Weed and acid go hand in hand you gotta have weed when you're tripping you just have to. And also the description of her character is a good description of acid and how it is "Lucy was a strange girl and sometimes made murry uncomfortable and nervous but he would always chill out around her and he would have the best times he can remember. Everytime the two met up it was like a match made in heaven. Lucy and murry. But they didn't communicate well lucy was kinda hard to read. Their conversation went like this."
and also in the conversation on the phone murry and lucy have she says
L- i'm gunna take about an hour to come on over though.M- well just call me then when you can.
She is gunna take an hour to come on over. Hour to come on. It takes about an hour for acid to come on, or start. NEXT!
Lastly we have Murry's ex, stacy. The girl that everyone would wanna take to the dubstep show girls and boys alike. His ex, stacy made him feel "he loved the way she made him feel sooo good and soo in love with everything."
His ex, stacy is ecstasy Everyone wanted to take her to the show. Murry knew he would see her there. She made him feel so good and feel like he was in love with everything.
Ok so again guys sorry for the lack of part two hopefully this will maybe blow your mind a little maybe not i don't know. If you wanted to know part two. Murry was gunna bone lucy. coco dean the conton sisters and al keyhall were all gunna fuck eachother. sill-o was going to die and his ex stacy would be hooking up with everyone on the dance floor right in front of murry. Anyway thats that. I have too much time on my hands.
 
subliminal messages is subliminal.

but it still sucked ,

you coullllllllld have been onto something
 
no he's got something here.

finish, it could be good.

wow surprised at how critical everyone is that's actually clever and original.
 
mindfucked the shit outta my high ass

its like a poem story

i wonder if any movies ar elike this like inception

Dom

Robert

Eams

Ariadne

Mal

Saito
 
I give hotassbeatclap mad rep, because he actually wrote itl so many of the stories on ns are coppasta,+k for originality
 
At first I thought you were on to something, but after part you just blew it I actually realized that reading part 1 but now I don't even care what happens to the story it's just ruined, thanks a lot man I was expecting better from you
 
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