Umm sorry to be the one to say this but probably not. It kinda would depend on your age a bit. But basically with the progression on skiing being so high right now what you need is really smooth tricks and more variety. If you wanna make it better do more pretzels.  90 on to 90 out isn't really gonna do it. Also through more grabs and hold longer. You had some big spins but companies wanna see more grabs then just straight spins. Also try switch tricks. And if possible maybe start working on mistys, rodeos and corks. Im not trying to shot your dreams down just wanna help you improve. You definitely had a few good tricks but the edit could have been better. Basically in order to have a solid edit for sponsorship you need to at least touch on a few areas in each category rail skills ( pretzels, lip slides, switch ups, un natti on), forward air (spins,  long grabs, variety of grabs, corks, inverts), switch airs ( spins, long grabs, variety of grabs, corks, inverts) and then try some unnatural stuff. Good luck and keep up the work.