Feedback on a Song

[PurpleDino]

What's up everyone, should probably put this in media and arts but that doesn't get much traffic. Anyways I just made a new track that has a dubstep like drum beat to it but is faster than a normal dubstep track. Not sure what genre it would be considered. Anyways give it a listen and let me know what you think please.

Life On Mars by Purple Dino

 

[PurpleDino]

If someone wants to embed it that'd be sick. Here's the link. http://soundcloud.com/mclusty/life-on-mars

 

[Bar_Down]

Life On Mars by Purple Dino

 

[Bar_Down]

i'll be honest with you, i really did not enjoy that

 

[PurpleDino]

Thanks for the embed. What'd you not like it? Kinda feel like you might just say the whole thing

 

[Bar_Down]

i didnt like it because in my opinion it was just a bunch of stupid noises thrown together and it made no sense and i just didnt want to listen to it.

 

[LIL-WAT]

this im afraid.

 

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[fucking_alias]

Well, I did like the begining. Two step + glitchy throw ins is always nice.

But talking quotes and cheering don't have any musical value in my opinion.

I'd love to see you drop that shit and throw in like... maybe another synth line? louder with more variation?

I did like it, but I can't stand all that talking shit.

 

[PurpleDino]

Thanks for the feedback. It's really just a rough cut so I'll keep working on it. I always have trouble trying to add in another synth line. The talking will go though

 

[fucking_alias]

What are you using for synths anyways?

You're probably using live I figure, but yea.

 

[t3hb055]

make it drop though. Dirty ass synth lines are legit

 

[PurpleDino]

Life On Mars (Revised) by Purple Dino /static/images/flash_video_placeholder.png Not really a dirty synth line but I added another synth line to it and got rid of all the talking shit.

 

[CAPITA-DEVOURS]

its the same thing over and over. i dun like it...

 

[Broseph_Stalin]

sounds like a spaceship battle suddenly turning into an onboard dance competition

 

[Gnarshred]

didn't really like the synth you added in that much, I think the first version was better...

But hey, nice work! You made a song, which is more than a lot of people can say they have done. Keep it up, keep learning, you'll get better!

 

[C.R.G.M.]

You need to add some lower, deep pitched "sounds" or "qualities" in it to make it sound more natural. It sounds like aliens jerking off, Im saying that in the nicest way possible. But if you drop some harder beats and lower pitch to it, that shit would sound ill. Besides that, didnt mind it too much!

 

[Winston_Smith]

totally hear aliens jerking off now

 

[C.R.G.M.]

Thoughts exactly... Why I said it haha

 

[Proze]

Its getting there. what BPM. honestly just make dubstep/2 step/ garage at 140 BPM and speed it up with tighter drum patterns or faster synths and pads and whateva. what you need is a bassline tho.

 

[maximiliaan]

meh

 

[PurpleDino]

Glad to get so much feedback. Thanks for all the tips. I think BPM was around 180

 

[DirtyDan]

Personally I think it sounds a bit choppy and repetitive.Here's what I would suggest doing...
Try adding more "reverb" to the beats to give them some depthMake the notes less marcotto(sp) aka just less cut and dry, try filling the notes out more.A good thing that I would do is maybe have a biuldup section and a drop. In the beginning or middle of the song.Also, try adding a semi continous sub bass liine that has a little bit of wobble.
Hope this helped a lttle.